Well its been about 2 weeks since I added another chapter to my story 
Unfortunately its been getting kind of hectic over where I live; my parents are getting suspicious over Something… I don’t know to be honest. Anyway, that’s really been the main reason why I have been unable to continue writing and posting on this forum. I want to thank all those that commented such nice things, you have no idea how much I appreciate your words guys ^^
Casper, thank you for taking your time to help me out with my story. I am in no way a professional writer, but having someone there that knows what he’s talking about really helps in the long run. I want to see if I can explain some of the errors you pointed out: